{"id":149,"date":"2024-12-27T06:32:36","date_gmt":"2024-12-27T06:32:36","guid":{"rendered":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/?p=149"},"modified":"2024-12-29T06:41:28","modified_gmt":"2024-12-29T06:41:28","slug":"149","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/2024\/12\/27\/149\/","title":{"rendered":""},"content":{"rendered":"\n<p>bertaut tajuk<br>bambu di Dusun Bambu<br>jalan pun teduh<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><em> (Versi I) <\/em><\/p>\n\n\n\n<!--more-->\n\n\n\n<p><br>bertaut bambu<br>siang di Dusun Bambu*<br>jalan pun teduh<\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><em> (Versi II) <\/em><\/p>\n\n\n\n<figure class=\"wp-block-image size-full is-resized\"><img loading=\"lazy\" decoding=\"async\" width=\"765\" height=\"764\" src=\"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2024\/12\/bambu-bertaut.jpg\" alt=\"\" class=\"wp-image-150\" style=\"width:245px;height:auto\" srcset=\"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2024\/12\/bambu-bertaut.jpg 765w, https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2024\/12\/bambu-bertaut-300x300.jpg 300w, https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/wp-content\/uploads\/2024\/12\/bambu-bertaut-150x150.jpg 150w\" sizes=\"auto, (max-width: 765px) 100vw, 765px\" \/><\/figure>\n\n\n\n<p><em>Foto: Wan Hanim Atan<\/em><\/p>\n\n\n\n<p>Komentar ulasan Fauzul El-Nurca (admin grup New Haiku Indonesia): <\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><\/p>\n\n\n\n<ol class=\"wp-block-list\">\n<li>Penggunaan kata &#8220;tajuk&#8221; pada teks awal, secara langsung menjelaskan bahwa yang bertaut itu adalah ujung\/pucuk-pucuk bambu; Pada teks kedua, pilihan kata &#8220;siang&#8221; (mungkin untuk memenuhi syarat kigo), sedikit menggeser &#8220;kesederhanaan&#8221; bahasa dan gambaran yang hendak dihadirkan. Alasannya, kata &#8220;siang&#8221; sudah cukup terwakili oleh kata &#8220;teduh&#8221; di L3, baik pemaknaan gambaran maupun untuk hal kigo. Kedua teks di atas dapat kita keker &#8220;menggunakan kacamata&#8221; toriawase-haiku; 1. bertaut tajuk bambu di Dusun Bambu ~(kire)~ jalan pun teduh<\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>bertaut bambu, siang di Dusun Bambu (kire) jalan pun teduh <\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>Memang tidak ada yang perlu dipermasalahkan dengan kedua teks tersebut, namun memilih pengungkapan yang lebih sederhana, dan meminimalkan &#8220;pengulangan&#8221; makna (apalagi kata), buat saya adalah titik pertimbangan paling menentukan. <\/li>\n\n\n\n<li>Saya berharap ini menjadi saran, paling tidak mencoba berbagi melalui karya bung Juru Baca yang cukup menginspirasi, terutama buat sahabat NHI lainnya\u2026 Salam EGOLESS<\/li>\n<\/ol>\n\n\n\n<p> <\/p>\n\n\n\n<p> <\/p>\n\n\n\n<p><br> <\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>bertaut tajukbambu di Dusun Bambujalan pun teduh (Versi I)<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":1,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"closed","ping_status":"","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"pagelayer_contact_templates":[],"_pagelayer_content":"","footnotes":""},"categories":[1],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-149","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-haiku"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/149","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/1"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=149"}],"version-history":[{"count":1,"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/149\/revisions"}],"predecessor-version":[{"id":151,"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/149\/revisions\/151"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=149"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=149"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/haiku.haripuisi.com\/index.php\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=149"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}